大家好我是原po,关于第一句我有再次更正的写法与大家分享：
“A Brief History of Time" was the most famous work published by Stephen Hawki
ng, who was well-known for the achievement in astrophysics.
感觉比第一次的写法更通顺些了，也非常谢谢大家指教
※ 引述《mintale4867 (MinTale)》之铭言：
: 发现推文好像无法连推...只好回文
: ※ 引述《sunset (爱情的正常性混乱)》之铭言：
: : 1. 以天文物理闻名的史蒂芬灭N金，其出版的“时间简史(A Brief History of Time
)?
: : 是他最为人熟知的著作。
: : Stephen Hawking, who is well-known in astrophysics, published his most fam
ou
: : work "A Brief History of Time".
: 刚才推文提到这样会显得英文句构看起来有点不连贯，略作修改即可。
: Stephen Hawking, who is well-known for his contributions astrophysics and hi
s
: publication "A Brief History of Time".
: : 2. 即使罹患罕见疾病，霍金仍靠着先进的医疗技术延续生命，并活到了76岁。
: : Though suffered from a rare disease, Hawking had still extended his live b
y
: : vanced medical technology and passed away until seventy-six years old.
: 这里译文主要问题点在于“pass away”是单一时间点的事件，接“until”会让读者
: 不明所以，另外因为是“靠着”医疗技术延续生命，建议避免“had still extended”
: 这种“好像他可以自己掌控”的写法。
: 建议：
: Thanks to modern medicine advancement, Hawking managed to make it to the age
: of 76 despite the burden of rare disease.
: : 以上翻译若有需再修正，欢迎各位指教，谢谢！
: 语感养成真的非常花时间，我也还在继续努力 :D