[请益] 请问英文自我介绍

楼主: istee (istee)   2019-08-14 13:43:46
各位版大好:
由于小妹最近刚硕士毕业,需要找工作,想找有关科技业外商的工作,因此需要英文自传,但不确定自己写的好不好,已经有利用google, netspeak等网页查看有无错误的部分,希望各位大大能给些意见,谢谢大家。
My name is I-Ju Wang, and I was born in 1993. I graduated from Chiao Tung University where I majored in Material Science in master degree.
There are four members of my family. My father is a store owner, so I need to interact with people when I was young. It lets me become a social person. My mother is an accountant in the travel agency and is also my role model. I learned from her that if I worked hard, I won't regret anything. And I have a younger brother, we can give each other advice when we're going through hard times.
In college, I took part in many public benefit activities; For example, I joined beach cleaning and mountain cleaning activities. It not only keeps our environment clean but also makes me feel good. To cultivate a sense of responsibility, I volunteered to be a class leader and a badminton vice captain. With these experiences, I became more energetic and was able to work under pressure.
After I graduated from college, I worked at the National Synchrotron Radiation Research Center for one year. During this time, I can conduct beamline experiments, design experiments and solve problems by myself. These experiences sparked my interest in doing research, so I decided to study for a master's degree to improve my research ability.
During my Masters, my topic was "Tuning residual stress in highly (111)-oriented nanotwinned Cu". I learned a lot of skills such as electroplating, electropolishing, annealing, and carrying out high vacuum systems and vacuum cavity cleaning. At first none of my experiments working, I was under a lot of pressure. I tried to find the resolution of my experiment and worked around the clock. Fortunately, I found the method of solving the problems and was able to finish my thesis. Trouble shooting gave
me a sense of achievement and made me want to work in the tech industry.
In addition, I possess some experiences related to semiconductors. I participated in the semiconductor equipment course and realized how to operate the semiconductor equipment. I also experienced in electroplating wafers in a technology corporation. These experiences let me have the basic knowledge of semiconductors.
In order to enhance myself, I got many kinds of certificates like TQC-EXCEL 2010, C-level coach of badminton, 7th piano verification, technician for fixed crane operation, etc. I believe that I am a versatile person who can learn and adjust to anything. If I have a chance to work in your company, I would appreciate it so much and make an all-out effort.
作者: hlin12 (hlin)   2019-08-14 17:36:00
你中文面试会说: 我出生XX年?我家里有X个人吗?
作者: lesautres (地狱即他人)   2019-08-14 21:16:00
推楼上,其实大多数时候不是英文的问题
作者: bloedchen (Alles nur fuer dich)   2019-08-15 09:01:00
他也没说是面试时的讲稿,可能只是公司要求附上的文件
作者: hlin12 (hlin)   2019-08-15 11:39:00
重点不在是讲稿还是文件,而是在于讲出生几年,家里几个人,对于你应征上有优势?
作者: posen2012 (posen)   2019-08-15 13:03:00
同意一楼…讲重点 经验 兴趣 目标 期望 整理好再翻英就是尽可能在简短的介绍中让人了解自己的优点 大多主管都很忙
作者: discosoul (迪斯可魂)   2019-08-15 14:49:00
阿滴英文有一篇不错啊
作者: cuylerLin (cuylerLin)   2019-08-16 00:58:00
主词也不要用太多I开头,一搜寻不得了发现有29个...没有细看,不过第二段讲家人可以整个砍掉,然后最后一段有许多感觉跟你应征外商无关的经历都拿掉就是了...整体的话文法错误满多的...不过也许你先把架构清楚化起来再来修文法会是比较好的方式外商建议用CV or cover letter(不同国家不同称呼)架构来写会比一整篇要人家重头看到尾好得多,特别还要看流水帐与错误文法,举例:你讲硕论那段,就可以条列贡献与应征公司的连结,也会更清楚,讲skills那边不需要丢一堆抽象名词,直接列举你做了什么in layman's terms学会半导体器材那边也可以明确讲出学会了什么型号功能这样会直接凸显你相较于其他人的优势,直接看出鉴别度大致上这样,没有太多时间就不一一细看了,祝工作顺利

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