: Whether people receive higher education get more
: opportunities is a great issue in today's society.
我觉得 great 和 issue 接在一起很奇怪。
在这个论题中 issue 似乎太超过 problem也许会比较适合。
但是这似乎也不是“问题”，比较像是决定，所以
Whether people receive higher education get more
opportunities are debatable in the current society.
: In my view, I don't think this theory is right, and the
: followings are my reason. One reason is
: that people have their strengths and advantages,
: but not only in academic*. People's academic
* academic 名词不适合用在这
: achievement cannot represent their career path.
: The other reason is I know that many people who
: receive higher education cannot figure out what
: the job they want to do.
我个人不太喜欢使用 in my view 感觉本身就是赘字，
若是因为要凑字数，干脆用 from my point of view。
题目中有注明高等教育得到更多工作机会是个theory吗？
原因二需要叙述理由。
原因三跟主题不相关，不知道要干嘛和有没有比较多机会
完全是两件事。
However, I disagree with the idea and the reasons are
twofold. Firstly, it cannot show one's strengths
and advantages while we only focus on academic
success. Next, if the graduate does not work in
the field, the tertiary degree could be futile.
: As for me, I was not good at studying. After
: graduating from college, I didn't choose to
: enter a graduate school but did the job of the
: salesperson in a car dealer until now. In my
: company, I found that I have a talent to convince
: customers to buy expensive cars. After one year,
: I was promoted to a sales manager and received a
: lot of chances to go our branches company in
: American to learn more about management skills
: and take a series of training.
as for me 用在这个内容不通。
car dearer 通常指买卖都有，让人联想到二手车。
Personally, I did not choose to take higher education
since I have never performed well in the school.
After graduated from the college, I got a job as a
salesperson for ***(company name) in the local branch.
I found myself have the talent to convince customers
to buy expensive cars. A year later, I got promoted
to the manager of sales department, and received many
supports from the company such as visting American
branch and training on management skills.
: I hope that one day I can have my own business,
: and I think my achievement will not be less than
: those whose degree is higher than me.
结尾离题。
Many friends from the college who chose the path
of higher education have not in the management
positions, which I believe the education does not
provide more opportunities in the career.