想帮你改 不过我想早点睡 先约略看一下
: Good afternoon, ladies and gentlemen (不要演讲)
: I am pleased to be here. Thank you for giving me this interview opportunity.
: My name is Michael Tsai. I entered National Cheng Kung University in 2009 and
: graduated in 2013 with a Bachelor of Systems and Naval Mechatronic
(X) 应该是想表达以学士身分 但写这样像利用一位学士
: Engineering degree.
: I am a person who is passionate about learning and good at supporting others.
( D E L E T E ) (改成：擅长与人相处或共事)
: For instance,I received the scholarship of Rachi company to teach mathematics
: in the KuangHua girl’s seniorhigh school.(这句我没参透...接收奖学金去教学?)
: I have about 1 year of experience in the led testing company. I was
^(working for LED..../ exp in ~testing.)
: responsible for daily machine correlationand assisted staff to deal with
(似乎未完?) ^ (others/co-workers)
: unusual situations. My work experience has prepared me to work with all
^(e.g.) (句意、文法错误)
: types of people. I am interested in electrical machine, so I apply for the
(怪 种类是指? ) (不要只讲兴趣 要讲能力够不够胜任)
: instrument and electrical equipment maintain engineer in the Solid-State
(maintenance) (X)
(我不知正确名称 可以看公司征才页英文版)
: Polyester Division. I plan to learn programmable logic controller to help
(我觉得面试自己才正要学 意思等同"我就是不会")
: my work. My passion enables me to work hard and learn faster in any
: circumstances. If given the opportunity to join the company, I will be a
(主词是I喔) (换公司名称)
: great asset to the company as I make the best use of my skills and continue
(?)
: to improve.
: Thank you for your listening.
以上只是初步看一下，你先试着改看看
如果面试只是要看你英文口说流不流畅 那其实也不用太拘泥
增加长度可以加点日常兴趣 说你喜欢运动之类的 或参加过社团
这都可能提升主管对你的认识 判断你适不适合公司的工作性质