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可以请大家帮我看看，并给予我建议吗？谢谢

直接找人重新写一篇 感觉会好点

这篇真的不行，表面上是英文，但实际上都是用中文逻辑写的，感觉很像把中文自传丢进google翻译的结果，建议找人直接重写一篇+1

建议你英文不好就只写中文自传就可以了，或者去网络上找英文自传的template 改成自己的版本，你这个要整个砍掉重练

我居然看得懂

中文式英文 第二句开头就不想看了

用西元吧......

英文写的不太好 看不是很懂

好惨 先去参考别人写的范本吧

这是中文还英文....gg

小建议，英文不光是单字而已，句型跟文法也都很重要，看得出来你在单字上有用心，但句型不是很顺畅，文法上也有明显错误。如果把你这份自传当成你交给公司的第一份作业处理，你觉得应该再花多少功夫才能达到满分呢？

My penis long.

英文字传看到第一句写"My name is..."就注定整篇要改了

典型把中文自传翻成英文 给我第一份写得很像 英文的逻辑跟中文不同 先找的范例看看

用民国年是怎么样的概念...

如果不是面商业英文等级的需求觉得ok能辅助专业能力即可 自传写的太好英文口试面一下就知道这文章是不是你写的 建议诚实

using office? 还没毕业说自己是marketer?

真心建议先去网络上多找几篇英文自传和履历看一下，不熟悉或第一次写多参考他人写法会比较顺

这是国高中英文程度? 句子太短 I太多

友善一点吧 大家都混口饭吃

时态要注意 自传描述过去 80%以上过去式 建议你可以使用grammarly去修正

参考别人都怎么写的，模仿看看

英文很惨，不过看的出来有用心在写，加油啦

加油

I你I I I不完~

I好像真的有点多，但有努力写给推

找范本改写吧 做事情要找对方法啊～