英文自传求批

楼主: sz06060817 (rose)   2019-07-08 04:24:04
My name is , I am studying in the third year of studies towards National Chia
yi University - Department of Marketing and Tourism Management. I am passion a
te for social media marketing.
I am a coordinator of the treasure love community responsible for the plannin
g and execution of the event. I was responsible for an activity to Welcome New
Students resulting in expanding my team to 10 people from 5 initially.
I have served as a public relations role experience in writing and writing a c
opy. I have an idea on planning a copy.
Despite my hectic schedule at school, I also participate in several non curric
ular activities, including volunteering for my dormitory, working as a teachin
g assistance at an English Institution...etc. I have learned a lot of interper
sonal and time management skills through the experiences.
I often write about urcosme's product experience. I will publish a product in
ig and get 154 people by love.
Foxconn 94 students internship program.
Help promote Asia Pacific Telecom and computers.
Winning experience:
The 2018 national colleges and universities green tourism creative travel plan
ning competition is preferred. The design concept attracts consumers' journeys
.
License Expertise: The score is 725 points. I use tutoring and listening to En
glish broadcasts to increase my English ability.
While I am looking into a full time summer internship, I will also be availabl
e to continue working on a part-time basis when the new semester gets started.
I will be more than happy to discuss with you further about my future schedul
e for working as a part timer at your company.
Thank you very much for your time. I look forward to discussing with you soon.
可以请大家帮我看看,并给予我建议吗?谢谢
作者: PANG920 (PANGSHAN)   2019-07-08 05:45:00
直接找人重新写一篇 感觉会好点
作者: xvited945 (sk0k0)   2019-07-08 06:40:00
这篇真的不行,表面上是英文,但实际上都是用中文逻辑写的,感觉很像把中文自传丢进google翻译的结果,建议找人直接重写一篇+1
作者: liicat (liicat)   2019-07-08 07:01:00
建议你英文不好就只写中文自传就可以了,或者去网络上找英文自传的template 改成自己的版本,你这个要整个砍掉重练
作者: KEYork (York)   2019-07-08 07:09:00
我居然看得懂
作者: psychopath (psychopath)   2019-07-08 07:50:00
中文式英文 第二句开头就不想看了
作者: jack0419 (jack0419)   2019-07-08 08:00:00
用西元吧......
作者: dosandonts (Catalano is A+)   2019-07-08 08:05:00
英文写的不太好 看不是很懂
作者: kobe06180618 (xd020488978)   2019-07-08 08:40:00
好惨 先去参考别人写的范本吧
作者: jayouch (兔兔毛光光)   2019-07-08 08:45:00
这是中文还英文....gg
作者: qwert8392042 (Weiiiii)   2019-07-08 08:51:00
小建议,英文不光是单字而已,句型跟文法也都很重要,看得出来你在单字上有用心,但句型不是很顺畅,文法上也有明显错误。如果把你这份自传当成你交给公司的第一份作业处理,你觉得应该再花多少功夫才能达到满分呢?
作者: pttnowash (不用洗)   2019-07-08 09:37:00
My penis long.
作者: minniegc (Minnie)   2019-07-08 10:29:00
英文字传看到第一句写"My name is..."就注定整篇要改了
作者: lolitass (嘿)   2019-07-08 11:28:00
典型把中文自传翻成英文 给我第一份写得很像 英文的逻辑跟中文不同 先找的范例看看
作者: kryolanfans (理查)   2019-07-08 11:33:00
用民国年是怎么样的概念...
作者: LuMya   2019-07-08 11:39:00
如果不是面商业英文等级的需求觉得ok能辅助专业能力即可 自传写的太好英文口试面一下就知道这文章是不是你写的 建议诚实
作者: suweiQQ (宝贝)   2019-07-08 11:53:00
using office? 还没毕业说自己是marketer?
作者: c11121212 (吃吃)   2019-07-08 12:13:00
真心建议先去网络上多找几篇英文自传和履历看一下,不熟悉或第一次写多参考他人写法会比较顺
作者: snoopy200279 (寶傑,你覺得呢?)   2019-07-08 13:31:00
这是国高中英文程度? 句子太短 I太多
作者: anr2 (???)   2019-07-08 16:33:00
友善一点吧 大家都混口饭吃
作者: tin8420 (恒恒)   2019-07-08 16:38:00
时态要注意 自传描述过去 80%以上过去式 建议你可以使用grammarly去修正
作者: anper (镜中人)   2019-07-08 18:04:00
参考别人都怎么写的,模仿看看
作者: Saaski (GreedIsGood)   2019-07-08 21:17:00
英文很惨,不过看的出来有用心在写,加油啦
作者: bravo223999 (ShiJie)   2019-07-08 22:33:00
加油
作者: skyyo (鲁蛇收集师)   2019-07-09 08:32:00
I你I I I不完~
作者: showhere (人参阿)   2019-07-09 09:22:00
I好像真的有点多,但有努力写给推
作者: eachunglin (POLO)   2019-07-11 09:10:00
找范本改写吧 做事情要找对方法啊~

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