[履历] 新鲜人英文求职信求批

楼主: dragon0518 (Dragon)   2016-12-26 15:42:08
个人学经历背景: 成大企管硕士
欲应征之职务: Garena储备干部计画
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Dear Hiring Manager,
My name is ooo and ooo is my nickname. I earned my master degree
in business administration from National Cheng Kung University in 2016.
Garena is famous for games. However, the most attractive to me is your vision
and goal. Garena not only wants to be a game provider but also wants to be a
consumer internet platform provider. Just like your slogan “connecting the
dots”. I always would like to be a “dot” to connect each person and make
this world better together. The most important is I am so passionate about
the internet and the electronic commerce. That is why I am interested in this
program.
In 2015, I joined (A company) during the summer vacation, the company which is
running the most popular SMS app in Taiwan. In the two months, I was a member
of the PR team. I assisted in holding the press conference, writing the press
releases, and I had been interviewed by TV news for three times. I learned
how to interact with the journalist and knew how to attract media’s
attention. Moreover, I acted as the contact window for a crossover PR event.
To be a good project owner, I had a responsibility to contact PR agency and
our partner simultaneously to discuss and confirm every detail thing, even
the color of microphone brand. In this project, I planned, developed and
implemented it with my colleagues’ assistance. I learned how to make
decisions quickly but carefully. I also found the importance of teamwork, so
I enhance my interpersonal and organizational skills from this project. To
sum up, I not only made a lot of friends in this 8 weeks, but also recognized
how to work effectively and efficiently in an internet company.
Two years ago, I interned as a marketing assistant at (B company). During the year.
I had been working closely with senior marketing executives on several new
product promotions, planning the press conference, researching the market
trend and dealing with consumer feedback. In addition, I had a chance to
learn what internet marketing is and how to promote the products through the
internet. What impressed me the most was I made a slogan for a product and it
was used on every poster and catalog. Through this internship, I have
developed analytical skill and honed my knowledge of marketing and
communication skill.
I am an enthusiastic, pleasant and open-minded person. Therefore, my friends
usually described me as a good team player. I believe that teamwork is always
better than individual. And the reason I got good GPA is I am a quick
learner, especially the thing about computer and the internet. Given my
experience and personality, I think I am a strong candidate. I look forward
to joining and contributing to your firm.
A copy of my resume is enclosed for your reference. I would appreciate an
opportunity to discuss my qualifications at your earliest convenience. I can
be reached at 0912-345678 or via email at [email protected]/*
作者: dosandonts (Catalano is A+)   2016-12-26 17:34:00
Could you please write down the "specific" result?for example, how many public are attracted by youor what kine of achievement do you fulfill?the above listed is like a conversation instead ofa outstanding introduction
作者: alice78226 (紫)   2016-12-26 18:56:00
看的出来很努力准备内容,但求职信来讲太长了,基本上以三段限,第一段你是透过什么管道知道这个职缺的信息应征的动机是什么,然后你有什么能力足以胜任(用关键字,第二段再针对第一段提到的能力做进一步详述,第三段则可着重在软性技能描述。
作者: DFIGHT (低調好人)   2016-12-26 20:03:00
你一天用四成电,爱疯称不了的,有充电的我看第一段就不想看了,好长,拜托你早点进入正题你把第一段闪了,倒数第二段拿去当开头
作者: fishinthesky (在空中的鱼)   2016-12-26 20:38:00
你的英文有待加强
作者: xiangming (乡民)   2016-12-26 22:32:00
文法不好尽量用条列式写重点 不然一看就错一堆...
作者: mimi0254didi (餅乾)   2016-12-26 22:51:00
wants 重复两次可拿掉后方的the most important is I 文法错 重写文法有些问题 找个native 帮你看 我懒得看了
作者: a3358826 (马盖先)   2016-12-27 08:35:00
文法几乎每句都有点问题 最好上网找范例修改比较好不然与其一下被人看出缺点 不如不要附
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