[文法] 201608空中英语教室批改作文

楼主: scju (QQ)   2016-08-13 11:47:28
各位好,请教这一期201608空中英语教室批改作文的部分。
#表示编辑认为应删去
[]表示应加上
How English Has Changed My Life
That is the question. When I was young and naive, teachers and my
parents always told me that English was very important, whether in #the#
normal life or in the future. Thus, I started learning English when I was
just about five #and#[or] six years old. I thought it was tough and boring
at first, but gradually, I found that learning English #is#[was] not that bad,
actually it was quite interesting! Since then, going to language school
became the most exciting thing #in# every single day, and I like[d] my
classmates and teachers so much#,#[.] #t#[T]here #are#[were] also lots of fun
activities, which I always enjoyed a lot. Getting older and more mature,
my class level was getting higher and higher too. Now, I can't say my
English is the best in [the] class, but I can [be] sure that my English is
definitely not poor. Although I #had#[have] stopped going to language school
#anymore# now, #however,# I still read many English articles and magazines,
like SparkNotes, Studio Classroom etc. And I believe, in my future life,
English will truly help me and make me successful.
作者: kaifrankwind (大师兄)   2016-08-13 13:57:00
2. 问题不在连接词后接了两句 而是BC之间没有连接词有机会读到一些英文的"个人"blog等之类稍微轻松的语境 就会知道当前后两句感觉关系很紧密连起来很顺的时候 是可以只接个逗点而没有连接词的 这篇读起来确实也不是多严肃 应该还OK3. 年纪增长接课程程度提高 算理所当然 不会被误会所以可接受
作者: orfan (MISANTHROPE)   2016-08-13 14:55:00
1.开场白的概念!? 演讲时放第一句 写作时倒可有可无不过较常听到是here's the Q 有种你要讲得主题很重要的样子
作者: dunchee (---)   2016-08-13 20:58:00
1. 唯一的解读是"that"指的是题目。我是觉得这第一句很唐突("xxx如何xxx"本身不算是个"question"。如果连"xxx如何做"都不知道,那么之后的也不用写了。如果是要"质疑/批判"xxx如何做",那么之后的内容也应该是在"xxx如何做"本身)我的话会把这句整个删掉2. 既然是教/批改作文,这算是错误。看样子他们忽略了几个更改方法: 分号: .... that bad; actually it was ..直接断开: ... that bad. Actually it was ....dash(*1): .... that bad--actually it was ...(*1) http://tinyurl.com/7p56zq5 方框下 A dash ....explanations in a ...3. 你对。同前(既然...错误)
楼主: scju (QQ)   2016-08-14 23:25:00
感谢各位!

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