※ 引述《qazwsx3659 (我好高)》之铭言：
大家好我是朗尼，刚刚吃饭滑到一半就看到这篇了，
没什么事情做来回一下
我也不敢说我改的绝对更好，但就是给个建议
前几段太多Quotation mark了，建议你用颜色标记，
指强调最重要的科目一科即可
不然读的人会不知道你要强掉的是哪个科目，什么内容
这边先帮你去掉，然后上色
: 个人学经历背景：国立大学理工硕士
: 欲应征之职务：制程工程师
: 自传履历内容：
: I graduated from XXX University with a bachelor’s degree in
: chemical engineering.
这边建议你可以加入in什么年，
看的人可以马上反应出你毕业多久、
应该具备哪些能力、应该有什么工作经验等等
:I have a good command of Transport Phenomena”
帮你补个大写
: and Chemical Engineering Laboratory. Transport Phenomena
reveals the
: foundations of fluid mechanics, heat and mass transfer.
三个以上选像前两个用逗号吧
: On the other hand,
: Chemical Engineering Laboratory focuses on the interpretation of the
: observed physical phenomena using the theorems we’ve learned in Transport
: Phenomena. Whilst
正式书面语我们通常会用Whilst代替While
: learning the two subjects, I was trained to link physical
: scenarios to the corresponding scientific principles.
: Whilst taking Introduction to semiconductor processes in grad school, I
: realized that the manufacturing of semiconductors is highly relevant to the
: field of chemical engineering. 这边不用定冠词 Coating, photolithography and etching
: process contain details of diffusion, reaction kinetics, intrinsic properties
: of the chemicals, etc. Delicate control of the process is important for
: improving the yield. Therefore, I intend to apply my knowledge of chemical
: engineering to the semiconductor industry in the role of process engineer.
: I am equipped with logical thinking and problem solving skills owing to my
: research experience. I joined the “Biomimetic Membrane Interfacial Phenomena
: and Engineering Lab” in college and conducted a research project on the
: supported lipid bilayers solely. I was able to plan experimental procedures
: on my own, and to apply useful information in the literature to my
: experiment. In my master’s thesis project, I theoretically investigate the
不是很明白这边theoretically investigate
想要表达的意思，
是要表达1.你研究出载体理论上可以行得通
还是要表达2.你的想法可以让载体行得通但没有执行？
1.的话是 I investigated the adhesive dynamics of a drag vehicle to membrance
surface in theory.
2.的话是 I am able to investigate the adhesive dynamics of a drag vehicle to
membrance surface.
: adhesive dynamics of a drag vehicle to membrane surface. Constructing my
: simulation model requires solid bases of fluid mechanics and computer
: programming skills. The ability to extract useful particulars from
: comprehensive literature survey is also necessary to arrive at a solution to
: a problem at logical steps.
: Besides academic research, I also have 这边不用定冠词 experience of leading staff of
: over 50 students as the vice co-ordinator of the orientation camp.
Staff还满指工作上的雇员，如果是新生活动的话，这边建议用members
: It
: makes me realize that communication is the key to an efficient collaboration.
: Disagreements are inevitable when working with other people as a team. I
: assemble a daily meeting to sort out the discrepancies via timely
: communication, and it is proven to effectively reduce the disputes.
: I can confidently say that I am ready for the position.
我真的真的真的很少看到有人用这么自信的方式说明
我通常都是看到
I believe I am well ready for the position.
I believe I will fit this position well.
: The research
: experiences concrete my ability to use good judgement and logic in solving a
: problem. The teamwork experience allows me to improve my collaborative
: skills. Along with these experiences, I look forward to developing myself and
我知道这很怪，通常to后面加的都是原形，但look forward to +Ving是少数例外
: keep pace to the rapid renewal of this industry.
: _____________________________________________________________________________
: 因为英文文章的写法跟中文不太一样，所以没有照着中文自传翻译
: 虽然检查过很多次，中文自传有提到的特质跟实例都尽可能写进来了
: 但第一次写英文自传一定有很多地方需要改善
: 请各位前辈不吝指点，谢谢您的阅读!
我是不知道你要应征台湾的还是国外的公司
但是这个写起来很像cover letter + curriculum vitae的格式
可能是其他部分没有翻成英文
通篇读完的感想是
好，我知道你在哪些学科有什么应用
但我不知道你这个人的性格适不适合这个职位
没看到文章内有说明团队合作的能力，
只有看到领导能力
没有看到你的抗压性和对工作的热诚
如果可以
1. 简单的个性自我介绍
2. 简单阐述为什么想做这份工作
3. 举例说明自己有问题解决能力
4. 简单介绍自己工作规划与能带给公司什么
会更好
希望你能参考参考
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