Re: [请益] 有没有英文好的学姐能帮我看几行自我介绍

楼主: benny8661 (fabulousboy)   2018-09-01 08:46:35
※ 引述《PolyCoin (乱世雌雄)》之铭言:
: 以下是我的英文自我介绍
I've worked as a qualified nurse in the emergency room for the WXY hospital si
nce I graduated from nursing college in June, 2017. In the face of life or dea
th situations, I am fearless (我自己觉得读起来这里很空虚,加点东西比较好,像是
为什么你觉得你fearless?而且用i am fearless中二中二的,试试i always see myself
as a fearless fighter如何?). Every time I see the pain in my patients as well
as the worries of their families, the only idea that comes to mind
is to save their lives (and ease their pain 你前面提到pain结果没处理反而变成
救命不是怪怪?) as i could. I am proud of my career/profession(比较好,不要用j
ob) out of a strong sense of morality(moral duty母汤喔,好像没这种用法,duty
是义务馁,而且你后面已经要用duty了不是), thus I hope that with my effort, I ca
n provide a caring environment while im on my duty.(我自己觉得这里不太好,感觉
你不在你工时就不管事,可用一些连接词把话锋转一下,改成别的结论)
: 不过我担心能力不够所以会有错误和不够口语的地方
: 毕竟这是我要口头上做自介的而不是书面作文
: 谢谢热心帮忙揪出错误的学姐们
以上,希望有帮到忙
三年没练英文了哈哈
所以也是可能有错XD
学姐加油哈哈

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