※ 引述《jt910203 (aa)》之铭言：
: 题目：
: 现在越来越多人喜欢使用网络的即时讯息，他们偏好在网络上打字胜于打电话。
: 1. 请给一些造成这种情况的原因。
: 2. 这样的沟通方式会产生什么样的潜在问题？
: Nowadays, with the advance of technology, sending instant message on the net
: is getting more and more popular . People prefer sending message in typing
: way rather than giving phone call. That is because most of electronic
: products have the function of surfing the net such as computers and
: smartphones, which of them used by people everywhere. People not only can
: send and get the instant message in one second, but don’t have to pay the
: high expense of phone fee. Therefore, this kind of communication way becomes
: a trend in life of people.
Nowadays, with the advance of technology, sending instant messages on the Net
is getting more and more popular. People prefer sending text messages to
making a phone call. The main reason to account for the preference is the
convenience that electronic devices, such as computers and smartphones, bring
to. Such a communication is not restricted by time and space. People can send
their messages and get responses quickly. Another reason is the cost. Compared
with a phone call, which may cost over 100 dollars in one minute, a text
message on the Net is completely free. Due to the two reasons above, sending
text messages on the Net has been very trendy and even indispensable to some
people.
根据你的论点,帮你改了第一段,给你一些建议
1.段落的结构要清楚,尤其这种论理的文章,主题句,支持句和结论要有骨架,让读者易于
阅读。
2.文法要掌握。例如message是可数名词要记得加s,net小写是网子,大写才是网络。
prefer Ving to Ving。
3.句子的结构要正确。which of them,还有not only，这两句的用法有问题。
一些浅见,希望你的写作能愈来愈进步
: On the other hand, this new communication way have two potential problems.
: Firstly, students may like to spend most of their time chatting with their
: friends on the net, and neglect their school works. Secondly, if people
: always interactive with people in this way, they will have bad human
: relationships. Therefore, even if the new communication way is changing people
: ’s life, we still have to communicate with people in real way such as
: companng with family and our friends, and should not be controlled by
: electronic products.
: 几百年没写一篇完整的英文作文了
: 想请各位批改下我的作文
: 可以的话...希望能告诉我通过中高级写作还要加强哪些地方
: 谢谢各位