大家好，
我是SK2的Rosa，今天要来跟同学聊聊托福写作。
同学常觉得写作是四科里面最好进步、准备起来CP值最高的一科，
但是仍然有许多同学打了四五百字，却拿20初头的分数。
其实在作文里面，除了主题句之外，例子也很重要，
有好的主题句之后，读者是看你例子的说服力决定是否要相信你。
那到底要如何写出好的例子呢？
以下给同学三点建议，让你的作文拿下28分。
一、相关-只谈一件事
在写例子时，最重要的一件事是要专注只谈一件事，譬如：你的主题句理由
是能够省钱，在写任何一句话时，你都要想着“省钱”的这件事。不要又很
随性地提起”喔对了，除了省钱，也会非常省时间喔！”
例如：
I am poor, and studying in Europe can save me a lot of money. For
example, when I enrolled in INSEAD 1-year MBA program in France, I
only have to give a tip which is around 10% of the total bill.
Also, I just have to study for around 1 year, amounting to only 1
million NT dollars. Yet, if I had studied in Harvard University in
Boston, then I might have had to tip the waitress generously every
time I dine out. As a result, I might have spent at least 3000 NT
dollars for a meal. Apparently, studying in Europe not only saves
me money but also time.
把最后一句话改成
I am poor, and studying in Europe can save me a lot of money. For
example, when I enrolled in INSEAD 1-year MBA program in France, I
only have to give a tip which is around 10% of the total bill.
Also, I just have to study for around 1 year, amounting to only 1
million NT dollars. Yet, if I had studied in Harvard University in
Boston, then I might have had to tip the waitress generously every
time I dine out. As a result, I might have spent at least 3000 NT
dollars for a meal. Apparently, studying in Europe saves me
millions of NT dollars.
二、具体-写熟悉的事物
例子除了必须要每句话都跟主题句相关之外，也要具体。所谓的具体是指要
有足够多的细节。建议同学能够写日常生活中你熟悉的事物，譬如：谈到”
省钱”，你可以举你的朋友去欧洲唸书念了两年才花了两三百万，但是到了
纽约唸书的朋友，两年总共花了近一千万。当你写的是你很了解的事情时，
自然地就会有许多的细节，也会够具体。
此外，建议同学遇到“时间”或是“金钱”时，能够加入数字。同学常常在
一个段落里面，会出现很多次“save money”, “save a lot”, “cost
too much”,”not affordable”，但是如此一来，读者常常会纳闷，“到
底是省了多少钱叫做省很多呢？”，假如能够改成“only costs 8 dollars
”, “costs at least 100 dollars”，是不是更有说服力了呢？在例子里
面加入细节或是实际数字的时候，不用担心评分官会去查证这件事，然后如
果你写的与事实不符，就给你比较不好的分数。托福写作主要看的是你的说
服力，意即你有能力提出具体证据来应证你的论点。因此，证据真伪不重
要，重要的是够具体。
三、直接-专注在改变
许多同学在写例子时，都会很习惯铺陈，写了许多现况或是还没改变之前的
事情，但是在英文的逻辑里面，读者会预期例子要尽量直接。这是因为对方
没有太多时间阅读你的作文，所以建议同学尽量写改变的过程以及改变的结
果，现状不用交代太多，举个例子：
I am poor, and studying in Europe can save me a lot of money. For
example, I have always been poor and I often have to eat instant
noodles for months on end. Yet, when I enrolled in INSEAD 1-year
MBA program in France, I only have to give a tip which is around
10% of the total bill. Also, I just have to study for around 1
year, amounting to only 2 million NT dollars. Yet, if I had
studied in Harvard University in Boston, then I might have had to
tip the waitress generously every time I dine out. As a result, I
might have spent at least 3000 NT dollars for a meal. Apparently,
studying in Europe saves me millions of NT dollars.
同学可以直接拿掉白色的部分，变成
I am poor, and studying in Europe can save me a lot of money. For
example, when I enrolled in INSEAD 1-year MBA program in France, I
only have to give a tip which is around 10% of the total bill.
Also, I just have to study for around 1 year, amounting to only 2
million NT dollars. Yet, if I had studied in Harvard University in
Boston, then I might have had to tip the waitress generously every
time I dine out. As a result, I might have spent at least 3000 NT
dollars for a meal. Apparently, studying in Europe saves me
millions of NT dollars.
最后做个总结，
关于托福的独立写作，请同学记得这三个原则：相关、具体、直接
祝同学能够越写思绪越清楚，也能够更喜欢用英文思考、写作文！
新年快乐！;D
Cheers,
SK2 Rosa ^___^